This poem is phenomenal. LOVE LOVE LOVE this part:
“flowing through veins like water from Nile used to create her
forming womb to incubate the creation’s creation
and beautifully curved and supple bosom to sustain it
finishing by breathing into her nostrils the breath of life”
Wow…. I really like this one…. this is what caught me “and hand and fingers with which to hold
shaping heart for love’s capacity
sending blood through body
flowing through veins like water from Nile used to create her”
I like this quite a bit. It does several important things: 1) reverses the expectation established in Genesis that the male came first, which 2) reduces “Man” to his right place as the natural offspring of “Woman”; and 3) it has the geography right! We began in Africa. Only proper that our creation stories be set there. My only complaint: it could be much longer (that’s a compliment, btw). You’ve chosen an epic subject, you might have the core of a modern epic poem here. Well done.
Wordplay 
I like this. I smell u on this piece. Love the alternative take on creation.
Love this poem, it exudes beauty, your story of creation and the descriptions take it to another level.
This poem is phenomenal. LOVE LOVE LOVE this part:
“flowing through veins like water from Nile used to create her
forming womb to incubate the creation’s creation
and beautifully curved and supple bosom to sustain it
finishing by breathing into her nostrils the breath of life”
Wow…. I really like this one…. this is what caught me “and hand and fingers with which to hold
shaping heart for love’s capacity
sending blood through body
flowing through veins like water from Nile used to create her”
*snapping fingers*
Wow! Beautiful imagery and descriptions!! you’re dope! I’m so glad I can access your site from my phone!!!!
Amazing!
You paint such a beautiful picture with your words.
You have every right to pat yourself on the back.
As always, a pleasure!
This is lovely! You paint such a beautiful picture and this is an interesting take on creation of man. love it!
A beautiful post for all of us mothers on Mother’s Day. Thank you!
I like this quite a bit. It does several important things: 1) reverses the expectation established in Genesis that the male came first, which 2) reduces “Man” to his right place as the natural offspring of “Woman”; and 3) it has the geography right! We began in Africa. Only proper that our creation stories be set there. My only complaint: it could be much longer (that’s a compliment, btw). You’ve chosen an epic subject, you might have the core of a modern epic poem here. Well done.
Simply LOVED this Piece The dawning of man, the ORIGINAL Asiatic BLACK MAN! This is SOOOOO PEACE!